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The Pen is Mightier than the Sword

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Written in real-time, transcribed at Wren Wind's request. Minor word order changes to clean it up. EP31

 

In love with love, and the fantasy woman

Which I painted over you

You might've been good for me

And I could've been good for you.

 

But I loved the fantasy woman too much

And didn't give up the dream

And now we've parted into our lives

Our togethers will never be seen.

Posted (edited)

That was great! I feel like there's more there, waiting,pushing to come out. Maybe adding to it or changing some words. I dunno, it just didn't satisfy my hunger to understand. Maybe thats the whole plan...

 

Reading it one more time, I actually think it's fine the way it is. I think the problem is, that I have encountered this and was dumbfounded by his missguided efforts to make me fill the shoes of a woman not real. So when I read this...I just, it takes me back and I remeber that I couldn't understand how ridiculous he was for not accepting the real me!

 

Thanks for putting a common stupidity and reality,

Into Words We Can Read.

Edited by Tattered
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