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To judge the man with deep regret

Before to know the toil he's met

To watch the tears of widows fall

When I, myself avoid the call

To read of wars and damage done

Yet still complain when having fun

To cry of meals served 'not quite right'

While thousands die in bloody fight

To polish trophies on my shelf

To complain of lack of wealth

When children die from falling ill

They can't afford the saving pill

To dance upon my own free land

No care for battles in the sand

To discard food I cannot eat

While passing beggars on the street

To whine because my shoes are tight

Ignoring those with their own plight

This is the man I always see

This is the man I cannot be

Give me strength to do things right

Lest I become dark as the night

Posted

I think this lends some good insights into the way some people think. It is a remarkable contrast of conscience battling the things we would take for granted and perhaps do on a daily basis with little or no thought at all. That is why this poem I think has a very important message for us all about taking certain things for granted or even unconciously. We should all take some time every now and then to reflect a little on how easy we actually have it sometimes.

 

The only critical point I would make is that these lines broke the flow for me:

 

To polish trophies on my shelf

To complain of lack of wealth

 

My humble suggestion....

 

Can't protest about my health,

Yet complain of lack of wealth,

 

Good work hun.

 

:wolf:

Posted

I agree with you about those two lines, although my head can't put your suggestion in there either for some reason, hmmm how about......

 

I complain about my lack of wealth

As I place trinkets on my shelf

 

 

or maybe something else, so many possibilites hehe

 

ok we hate that, so this is the new couplet.....

 

I complain of hardship to myself

As I place my trinkets on the shelf

 

yeh!

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