Solivagus Posted August 29, 2003 Report Posted August 29, 2003 It comes in the night, Staying just out of sight. It appears in the sun, Having its fun. Death stalks us all, Summer or fall. It always draws near, Tasting our fear. It brings out the best, When sending us to rest. It brings out the worst, For those who are cursed. Death stalks us all, Summer or fall. It always draws near, Tasting our fear. It's work's always done, No matter how hard we run. Doctors and religion, Are merely a fiction.
Appy Posted August 29, 2003 Report Posted August 29, 2003 Simpel and honest, very nicely done.. usually i don't like repeated (whatsiscalled) 4 lines (lol) but here it makes it that much stronger.
Peredhil Posted August 29, 2003 Report Posted August 29, 2003 The repetition echoes the inevitability of the subject - effective use. Well-written on a morbid subject.
Parmenion Posted August 31, 2003 Report Posted August 31, 2003 Personally I love repeated four lines coz its soooo much easier to read (subjective view) Enjoyed this one immensely, especially the last two lines which sum up for me that Death is inevitable and if it wants you - there ain't nothing thats going to save you. Thanks for a good read
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