Beautiful Nightmare Posted August 27, 2003 Report Posted August 27, 2003 Three years ago, we met Our friendship had its highs and its lows Still my love steadily grows We have been there for each other’s pain. We have been there through each other’s shame The memories run through my mind You are so special to me, one of a kind I remember all of the times you said: “I love you” I grinned happily saying I loved you too All those happy times meant so much to me I knew you and me were meant to be I love you with all my heart I knew I would from the start My world revolves around you I love you so much, if only you knew I sit here happily and I think of you And all the crap we have been through I sit here happily, your hand in mine And when I’m with you, there is no time.
Appy Posted August 27, 2003 Report Posted August 27, 2003 I like it! Very well worded this, I especially like the last lines.. time just dissapears when being together with someone you love yes *huggles Arwen* stay happy dear, i'd like to see more of this :woot:
Peredhil Posted August 27, 2003 Report Posted August 27, 2003 stands and cheers You go girl! That's what I'm talkin' about!
Tasslehoff Posted August 27, 2003 Report Posted August 27, 2003 How can a kender disagree? Happy poems = good poems
Parmenion Posted August 28, 2003 Report Posted August 28, 2003 Good work my dear. Roll with the good times
Merelas Posted August 30, 2003 Report Posted August 30, 2003 Excellent poem!! I especially enjoyed the last stanza. Happy is good!! Keep up the good work!
DL_Snake Posted September 2, 2003 Report Posted September 2, 2003 Excellent poetry Arwen dear. However, me being the classical writer that I am, i'd think the first stanza spoils the flow a bit, cos you only have 3 lines as opposed to the aabb rhyming scheme you picked up, you got abb in the first stanza. Other than that, perfect! (Please pardon me, i'm a perfectionist, ya know i still love ya )
Alaeha Posted September 2, 2003 Report Posted September 2, 2003 Don't worry, DL... I probably would've mentioned it, if you hadn't. I might suggest adding a line to that stanza... Following "Three years ago, we met" Something like "A day I can't forget" or "Special, true... but yet" (The second would fit in quite well, or something similar, I think) As he said... Very nice. Very, very nice. Happy is good. Stay that way.
Tattered Posted September 2, 2003 Report Posted September 2, 2003 Good work. Congrats on your "very first happy poem" It's sounds like you are very content and in love. It's a euphoric feeling, nothing else can compare. Hey, lets work on some more of those happy ones, whuda-you-say?
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