the world today...blah

[Pestilence]

Not very complicated.. I was thinkin and this came up.... feedback would be appreciated

 

 

Everybody’s Apathetic, and I have the words to convince

God made the world in seven days, have ya heard from him since?

Even his followers, are just impatient to get greedy

They only prayed cause they thought it was like conversatin’ with a genie

How about the opposite character to this well thought fable

The Devil, who pathetically settles for the scraps off Gods table

Or Osama Bin Laden, who had others go train

When he’s so religious BUT chose to stay off of those planes

Then the so-called teachers which I think is absurd to call em’

Cause they’d rather flunk the student then have em’ learn the problem

Or maybe it’s the students we should be debating worthless

Cause the majority only attend school for the dating service

Or those who didn’t care for the price of condoms at the store

But really cared for the price it would cost em’ to abort

Then there’s the abortion doctor, his greed is known

Cause he carelessly kills babies just to feed his own

 

This is a story of apathy which I’m hopin’ you get

Basically mankinds been around forever & hasn’t broken a sweat

[Sorciere]

You tackled a lot of harsh topics in one poem there. I found the flow a little off in parts, maybe it was just the way I read it, but I very much understood your running theme and it was a very hard bunch of issues to cope with, well done!

[Parmenion]

Damn I enjoyed this so much. This is really the kind of style I enjoy. Agree with Sorciere to an extent that sometimes it didn't flow as well as it could have but in fairness it didn't make the poem itself any less enjoyable for me. Well done - its a good piece!