freeform- thoughts at a keyboard

[Boaz]

Life, that never ending night.

From birth one walks,

With their back to the sun,

Their face to the stars.

 

A quiet, drifting pathway,

Leading toward oblivions embrace.

Mistakes made, hearts broken,

With hope gone cold.

 

Never give up, follow your feet.

Love lost, love gained.

Choices are made badly,

And still yet pathways remain.

 

Emotions wrack my soul,

Highest highs, lowest lows.

The mountains are high and bright,

But the valley’s darkness surpasses night.

 

Consequences weight my back,

Bowed and straining I make my way.

Till one comes to remove my burden,

Made for myself, by myself.

 

Words written on phantom paper,

Fingers busily tapping out my gloom.

Thoughts shared with those that I don’t know.

To share, to remove, the oppressing doom.

 

But the shackles are tight tonight.

The feelings cling as my heart reels.

Emotions dripping like hearts blood.

Superficial gain, inconsequence losses.

 

Thoughts raw, unplundered by rhyme.

The wellspring of my words unfiltered.

Traditions and trappings of writing,

Thrown away in a fit of incomprehension.

 

But words are just words,

They bring no warmth to cold souls.

Only a transfusion from another heart,

Life’s blood of souls, someone’s love.

 

But god seems to hate some, while others shine.

Every dog has his day, and every day has its end.

Sympathies so slick and sweet slide off the tongue,

But it is unwanted- give me hate or love, something I earn.

[Merelas]

http://www.themightypen.net/public/style_emoticons/default/ohmy.gif

 

You have no idea how impressed I am, Boaz.

 

This throws away the conventions of poetry, dashes them completely...

 

And it seems that rules are meant to be broken. This is one of the most amazing poems I have ever read, and I am being quite sincere and honest when I say this.

 

You have a gift. The only thing I can say, is that it would be a shame if you were to waste it. Keep on writing. Treat us with more.

 

 

 

-Merelas en'Bella

[Vincent Silver]

Poetry shouldn't have rules, it's like putting bars around your emontions. Poetry is from the soul, you shouldn't be told how to write what you feel.

[Beautiful Nightmare]

*smiles* Wow i love the way you write and to be honest im actually quiet jealous that i cant write like you hun! I love you poems and i think that you should just post your poems here without having to be forced by Merelas! hehe! Well hun i expect to see alot more from you, if i dont i will be very dissapointed and hun u dont wanna get my cranky now do you?

[Peredhil]

I liked this on multiple levels.

 

quality over quantity, eh?