Vlad Posted August 12, 2003 Report Posted August 12, 2003 Falling from above I see ungodly tears- Because she has nothing. Not a thing to live for, Nor a martyr's will- Just a being in existance Trapped without her hope. Never getting loved, Lonely through the years Living every sin. Naming everyone a whore- Searching for one kill. Souls pierced by a holy lance- It can't be possible to cope And now my standards droop low. For this - is - the god I know.
Merelas Posted August 13, 2003 Report Posted August 13, 2003 A chilling, unfathomable view, presented well. Reminds me of Shakespeare when you break the non-rhyming pattern at the end... I believe, at the end of each scene, Shakespeare would twist a rhyme onto the exeunt. Well written. More, more!! (slams plate up and down on a table) WE WANT MORE! WE WANT MORE!
Ayshela Posted October 28, 2003 Report Posted October 28, 2003 i like this. "ungodly tears" to begin with, and "this is the god i know" innnnnteresting.
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