Alaeha Posted July 24, 2003 Report Posted July 24, 2003 Wrote this last night... It didn’t take very long, surprisingly... The hardest part, honestly, was trying to find a place to stop. Repairs Breathing in, and breathing out, Ruing all the words I gave Of love and trust. You took the route Killing my heart, you “loving” knave. Even now, when it’s too late... No. I cannot, will not hate. Have you ever thought it through Enough to truly realize Amid this chaos, “I Love You” Requires an effort? Else it lies To them, to you, to both your hearts. Some lies are worse than poisoned darts. Real anguish came from all of these, Evolving from the lies you told. Please understand, you can’t appease A shattered trust with worthless gold. In all these words, I hope you’ll see... Real trust is rare. I’ve none to give. Enough has changed, so let me be. Deal’s done. I have a life to live.
Peredhil Posted August 4, 2003 Report Posted August 4, 2003 Great progression from beginning Onward until the end Obviously a heartfelt plea Damaged hearts are hard to mend Pride begans to raise its head Out comes the strength! Evict the cad! Don't be sad! Meter, rhyme, and length.
Ayshela Posted August 4, 2003 Report Posted August 4, 2003 Ayshela checks her supply and finds there's still some left in the tube. Approaching Alaeha with a large stash of hugs, she also hands over the rest of her tube of Super Handy Emotional Superglue to help Alaeha glue her heart back together. *hugs* The poem is well done.
Parmenion Posted August 13, 2003 Report Posted August 13, 2003 This is truly a treasure of a poem! It read well from start till finish; it looked liked it flowed out really easily! After reading it several times I cannot figure if he's forgiven or not forgiven. I need to know! Kekeke, I git involved with it
Alaeha Posted August 14, 2003 Author Report Posted August 14, 2003 I've never really held it against him... I always regarded it as being a self-inflicted injury. After all... the only person who can grind your heart into the asphalt is the one you give it to. So I suppose you could say forgiven... I appreciate all the support on this one... I wasn't sure, really, how good it would actually be. *Hugs* "Even now, when it’s too late... No. I cannot, will not hate."
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