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The Pen is Mightier than the Sword

Leigh


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Now i have found it,

I can slowly claw my way out of the deep, dark pit.

I've searched all my life,

To find this one thing, that could drive me away from the knife.

 

Finally when i was about to give in,

And throw my life in the bin.

I found what i have been searching for,

The person, whom i could adore.

 

It was love at first sight,

I knew straight away when I saw him last night.

I knew he wasn't like other guys,

He wasn't a sleaze followed by flies.

 

He is caring and kind,

And takes over my mind.

He looks out for me,

And allows me to be free.

 

But now that I have found you,

You had better tell me everything true.

And not break my heart,

Or else i will hit you with my poisen dart.

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I found the changes in form a little difficult to get a flow the first time I read this, but after a second reading it flowed far better, a lot of beautiful emotion in this, the kind of feeling we all love to experience, hope and love. :)

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But now that I have found you,

You had better tell me everything true.

And not break my heart,

Or else i will hit you with my poisen dart.

geez... is that what you do to your bf? kinda scary... I hope the man of your dreams carry some antidotes around...

 

Heart is a hard word to rythem with..

but ... "Or else we will be forever part" sounds better...

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Hmm... Heart: Part, Start, Smart, Dart, Art, Mart, Cart... I'm sure there are others. Love is a much harder word to rhyme with without Cliche, so I endeavor to stick it in the middle of the line.

 

Anyways... I like this poem, though the rhythm is a bit strange. Love is a good thing. And I like the touch at the end... I could never bring myself to hurt someone I loved for hurting me...

 

Though if someone I care about winds up getting hurt by my ex like I did... I'll prove that bit about the pen being mightier than the sword.

 

*sighs*

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