WrenWind Posted July 9, 2003 Report Posted July 9, 2003 Taking time to smell the roses why bother They are withered and dry A penny saved and penny earned sure but you still only have a penny Whistle your cares away purse your lips the problem's still there Wash that man right out of your hair look around Dirty socks that miss the hamper every time Smile and the world smiles with you oh yeah didn't you know they were laughing at you? Look at the girl's Mother and you will know what to expect the reflection in the mirror is even scarier *don't mind me....... grumpy*
Peredhil Posted July 9, 2003 Report Posted July 9, 2003 But even having died for our pleasure Their subtle scent when withered Lingers for our leisure. A copper (but mostly zinc) penny found Reminds me of God's blessings When found on the ground. Problems come and fun is missed But your pursed lips Every day should be kissed. Men are hampered frequently when they aim Toilets, laundry baskets, social grace- But y'all love some of us just the same. And when YOU laugh I break out in smiles Even though we be separated By so many miles. I look at her mother and think she's just fine Even with all I've been through My boys came through her line. Huggles and ducks the swing... blows a kiss to the nose of miss grumpy
WrenWind Posted July 9, 2003 Author Report Posted July 9, 2003 Reads then reread and smiles Thank you *hugs Peredhil*
Parmenion Posted July 10, 2003 Report Posted July 10, 2003 Lovely poem Wren! Great response Peredhil! With friends like that Wren - how can ya stay being a big grumpasaurus for long? Thank you both for making me smile...
Rhapsody Posted July 10, 2003 Report Posted July 10, 2003 Wow, two wonderful poems! WrenWind, I loved how you used trite old sayings in you first line, then protested it in your next. You have an acute sense of irony and your sarcasm comes across as amusing. I'm loving the structure of your poetry cuz I know that structure is often the hardest part of writing good poetry. And Master Elrond always has something cheerful to say. Delightful. I hope to see more of your work in the future.
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