Surge Of Anger

[Tattered]

Confusion is the standard

And All clairity is shaddered

Body weak and body baddered

Brought on by myself, tattered

Torn with the whiles of the wind

Thrashed by the words from within

Some where down the line of defeat

I sold out, gave in and lost belief

The faith instilled in me lives on

Although all my dignity is gone.

Edited July 7, 2003 by Tattered

[Ayshela]

i can't believe this got no comment at all.

 

ignoring spelling errors, this is an intriguing piece.

 

i think my favorite lines are

Confusion is the standard

and

Thrashed by the words from within

but then, anyone who knows me knows they would be.

 

Minor spelling corrections:

clarity

shattered

battered

wiles (?)

 

*hugs*

[Yatsuna13]

you described my feelings perfectly...there are very few people who can do that

great great great...sometimes it's hard to express an emotion so i keep it locked inside for the longest time and the only time i can get it to come out safely is when i cry

 

 

my anger is a glass of water filled to the brim, i wait for it to tip over so i can be calm again

[dragonqueen]

Amazing poem, but the last two lines are a little confusing. Losing belief, but still having faith? Aren't they almost the same thing? Wonderful rythym and rhyme scheme.