Vlad Posted June 23, 2003 Report Posted June 23, 2003 A torrent in the seas, Winds blowing life away- The maelstrom of love... What happened so fast? What was it yesterday? Why does time fly by- When I'm with you...? Getting lost in the dungeons, Trapped in the catacombs. Strangled by the darkness, Of far corners never looked into. The deep recesses of my lonely heart. I see hope at the end, You are standing there forever- Looking at me with those eyes. Running in the mist, Chasing distant dreams- The ground gives way... I fall eternally. With your memory at my side.
Peredhil Posted July 2, 2003 Report Posted July 2, 2003 I'd make 'fast' into 'quickly' in the first stanza, but that's me begin a grammarian. I like the image this gives me. When I read it, I see someone using love as a light to explore themself, and as a lighthouse of sorts. Striving for that light is so worthwhile, that even when as they fall, it's okay, because they carry that light with them. This is the kinda thing I might write if I had a Muse who was also a real person - but I'd never met her.
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