Justin Silverblade Posted June 20, 2003 Report Posted June 20, 2003 (edited) (Edited to center the poem. Thanks Vlad!) It was inspired by a couple of friends of mine, who are deeply... found by eachother. Enjoy! Ripples on a Pond Beauty… Twilight’s mural upon the sky. Painted gold, Cascades down on lovers’ eyes. Silent embrace, The world holds a moment’s slumber. Soft caress, Calls a choir of unknown number, Quiet quintets of gull and geese. Majestic mimicry, Mirrored glass of sun’s release, As the hue above, below repeats. Worship water, Deep entwine, two wrapped as one, Earthly secrets lost – undone, Rejoicing hearts for unison. He for she, Eyes of fervor, compassion’s zeal Sweet nothings said, the world reveal, Patience, virtue, Emotion’s ideal, He gives to her, and humbly steals. Two lovers kiss. Giving truly, and taking freely, A lion’s angel, beauty in adversity, Great graces expose fierce loyalty, A delicate diamond polished distantly. She for he, Partner’s pool reveals the flesh But greater tides their souls enmesh In devotion their hearts refresh. Revealing river, Stage for flying dove or sacred doe, Painted splendor supports Love’s glow. Modest mockery, A child’s laughter elsewhere echoes, The innocence of tomorrow’s time, Gentle gesture, Speaks the man in silent rhyme, Unspoken hold, Is how her moment’s best can respond Nature’s awe, As ripples reflected on the pond: “Beauty…” Edited June 23, 2003 by Justin Silverblade
Vlad Posted June 23, 2003 Report Posted June 23, 2003 Wow, I like the symmetry of this poem. how the second half is basically the opposite of the first. This is really good. if you want to center stuff you use the tag < center > and < /center > (without the spaces though) like so
Parmenion Posted June 23, 2003 Report Posted June 23, 2003 This was very original and thoroughly enjoyable!! Thank you for sharing this wonderful little piece
HopperWolf Posted June 26, 2003 Report Posted June 26, 2003 That was pure joy to read. The symetary makes a lot of sense, not just there because it would be neat but adds to the poem. Also, excellent use of contrast and comparison. Can't praise enough!
Sorciere Posted June 27, 2003 Report Posted June 27, 2003 A very good poem, loved the wording and the layout added to it's enjoyment. Beautiful visually and literally.
Blondemoon Posted June 28, 2003 Report Posted June 28, 2003 Wow Justin... that was amazing. It read very smoothly, and it brought to mind other poems that I know I've read (but can't think of the names for the life of me). As Sorciere so accurately put it, beautiful visually and literally.
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