HopperWolf Posted June 9, 2003 Report Posted June 9, 2003 this is the first thing I've written in many months (I have been agonisingly unable to write) so go easy on me but I would reeeeallly appreciate any and all comments. Tis just a first draft though. ------------ Forced to walk the rope, Cross watery depths, Below, the teary graves, Mark too many Holy deaths. Tread the path before, Embrace the fall, To choose is to live, But have we any choice at all? Break free of your bonds, And take the dive, It looks deep enough from here, To control your own life. A world open before you, Freedom gained, Power of choice yours, Worth all chance and pain. Or keep to the rope, One destination, The same end for us all, No matter our intention. Walk reluctant, Or bend your knee, And think on those, Who thought themselves free. Walk not to reach the end, But look around, The journey will make you, You will find your ground.
Illianna Wolfsong Posted June 9, 2003 Report Posted June 9, 2003 Excellen Hopper! My thought... whatever revisions you may choose to make, the last stanza is perfect without any alteration. It could stand entirely alone and still have rich depth of meaning. *cheers*
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