Sorciere Posted June 8, 2003 Report Posted June 8, 2003 You always swore you’d love me Your safe arms protected me Until I angered them And you can’t take it back You told me I was special You stroked my fair skin softly But then you blackened it And you can’t take it back You kissed my full lips gently You stroked them with your fingers Then caressed them with your fist And you can’t take it back You trailed along my stomach With your hands so warm and soft Then you punched and kicked so hard And you can’t take it back My spirit broke inside me I finally found the strength I told them all about you And I won’t take it back
WrenWind Posted June 9, 2003 Report Posted June 9, 2003 strong subject to tackle and well done *hugs*
autumn_sun Posted June 9, 2003 Report Posted June 9, 2003 I really like this...I have a hard time writing poems that "flow" [is that the right word?] but this really good. props to you for going at a sometimes difficult subject and winning.
Illianna Wolfsong Posted June 9, 2003 Report Posted June 9, 2003 Sorciere, A beautiful way to capture such a hideous side of the human creature. *hugs*
Ayshela Posted June 9, 2003 Report Posted June 9, 2003 Excellently done, illustrating both the beautiful and the horrifying, found in the same person.
Justin Silverblade Posted June 11, 2003 Report Posted June 11, 2003 Powerful, and well written. Thank you for posting it.
Sorciere Posted June 12, 2003 Author Report Posted June 12, 2003 Thank you all for your wonderful comments
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