Vincent Silver Posted June 4, 2003 Report Posted June 4, 2003 The light pours onto my face Burning the pale hate It spins patterns of light through the stained glass Causing illusions of happy-ness on my face But I break the glass with a scream A scream of pain to break the dream The glass shatters and falls to the ground My soul follow suit All I can do now is cry With the memories of how things were
Peredhil Posted June 4, 2003 Report Posted June 4, 2003 Ouch. I think the stark simplicity really conveys the depth of pain here. No clever words to shield the intellect. The image of a stained glass presentation face to the world, shattered from within is a strong one for me.
Tasslehoff Posted June 5, 2003 Report Posted June 5, 2003 The simplicity of this poem speaks wonders. Its so deep, so harsh, so painful, yet the words, they speak to you clearly, no needed to find the secret meanings. Very good poem.. It just speaks out to me, catches my attention, and to me, that is 1 of the many things that makes a poem a good poem
gjunon Posted June 6, 2003 Report Posted June 6, 2003 the glass means alot that it is shattered i hope things get better (they most always do )
Wyvern Posted June 7, 2003 Report Posted June 7, 2003 I also thought that the image of the stained glass was a very effective one... The themes of illusion vs. reality and despair are both conveyed in an interesting and captivating manner. In addition, the poem flows well... Good work! :-)
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