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This challenge was actually inspired by scripture! Song of Solomon.

 

Your challenge is as follows:

 

Describe someone you love to me. I want to know about their physical appearance as well as your emotional connection. Do this without using any words that are body parts. (nose,stomach, hair, legs, nostrils etc.)

 

This is a free form write. You may do this through poem, flat out description, reflective thought or short story. HOwever you want to achieve this challenge is fine!

 

Have fun!

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softest cream vied with orange, silky to the touch.

lithely graceful in every moment, even in your pain

Tender embrace and purring response when held.

Silent support and love-filled look when consoling pain.

 

Now the cream and orange lies silent.

dignity and kindness to the end.

the taut restrained power liquid relaxation such as never happened in life.

 

A rose bush blushes over my lost love.

 

Speaking of Song of Solomon, the structure always fascinated me. It's Introversion and Alternation. Dr. C. D. Ginsburg in his "Commentary" (London, 1857, pg 4-6) has an interesting prose key to the story.

Note further that there are seven speakers who tell the story. 1) The Shulamite 2) the daughters of Jerusalem 3) Solomon 4) The shepherd lover of the Shulamite 5) the brothers of the Shulamite 6) the companions of teh shepherd & finally 7) the inhabitants of Jerusalem. All in eight chapters!

Erm, sorry, I happen to find this stuff fascinating. :)

 

The structure (thanks to E. W. Bullinger)

 

A (1:1-11; The introduction. The Shulamite separated. Taken by Solomon from her home and her beloved (shepherd) into the royal tents, pitched near them.)

 

B | C (1:12- 2:7; The Shulamite and her beloved together)

D (2:8 - 3:5; The Shulamite and her beloved apart)

 

B | C (3:6 - 5:1; The Shulamite and her beloved together)

D (5:2 - 8:4; The Shulamite and her beloved apart)

 

A (8:5-14; The conclusion. The Shulamite restored. Returned from Solomon to her home with her beloved shepherd.)

 

One of many examples of structure in the Bible.

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A horde of cute monkeys descends upon a large stone ball, which lies at the foot of a mountain which has spontaneously manifested right outside the Cabaret Room. The monkeys swarm into the shape of a large hand, which brushes against the ball, until the large chunka round stone, that is, the ball, begins to roll up the mountain.

 

As the cute lil furry critters (complete with prehensile tails, which are no less furry, nor less cute) roll the rolling ball, they begin to chant in a rhythmic fashion.

 

She counts with an hourglass.

She is far too polite to use an abacus.

(you shouldn't 'cus, you know)

 

Her warmth is like a waterfall,

her joy coming from a great height to all

diffracting sunlight in a ruddy glow.

 

Her ruminations are geometric,

but not shaped like your average geodesic.

Slow when fast, fast when slow.

 

She whispers long lost fairy tales,

of searches for crosses and sacred grails.

May her cup ever overflow.

 

She loses herself in the superficial,

sees a rose and yet thinks it a thistle.

May her garden ever grow.

 

I will pledge as she may drink,

Pray we rise when our fears bid us sink,

Unfreeze and bid we flow.

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I'm not familiar with the Song of Solomon (I'm far from religious), but this is worth a try.

 

Velvet wriggling, cinnamon on snow

Hearth-warm, used as a pillow

Porky plump, proud plume

Ravenous beast

Always consumes

Buries and exhumes

 

Defender of our turf

Racket in the night

Fearing the surf

Whimpers his plight

 

Former orphan

Now harbored under our roof

Child of masters

No longer aloof

  • 2 weeks later...
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I would love for you three to tell me who you wrote about. (well okay, Pered, you're off the hook, you explained.)

 

I rather like these, thanks for sharing!

 

~Salinye :butterfly:

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Hn... Meow... It's a little difficult to describe... let me see. It might not rhyme though...

 

 

Lovely dark threads upon her crown

Not quite black but a beautiful brown

Amber orbs that reflect kindness

Though sometimes sadness lies behind this

 

Thin, small glasses that never clash

A voice sometimes loud but never brash

Lovely alto and never annoying

To hear her speak is always enjoying

 

A smile that's pretty and often full of thought

Answers unavailable are always sought

Cheerful and bright, but full of emotion

And sometimes distraught at a lot of commotion

 

Intelligent and pretty, often full of humor

Never really spiteful, and never starts a rumor

In my mind she's perfect, with almost no flaws

A graceful beauty with elegant paws

 

I'm happy to be with her, I do love her so

Such compassion and grace I have the pleasure to know

I'll love her forever... from now until then

Always dear ashke, my beloved Elwen

 

(Meow... Eh... I hope she doesn't mind, and are paws body parts? I didn't know if you wanted ALL body parts, including animals, to be left out, but she has pretty hands, and... yeah. >;_;< 'tears of joy')

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