WrenWind Posted May 25, 2003 Report Posted May 25, 2003 Broken heart finds me weeping Shattered dreams All my hopes are creeping Out the door Empty feeling in my chest Lost will to care Maybe it's time for eternal rest blue pills shine Selfish way out .won't do it pills down the drain Pain is part of how we fit grab a tissue Anger is good
Parmenion Posted May 25, 2003 Report Posted May 25, 2003 /me grabs a tissue *sniff* too sad for me, I wants happy stuff! :woot:
Sorciere Posted May 25, 2003 Report Posted May 25, 2003 So sad but showing strength at the end, really liked it, thankyou!
Alaeha Posted May 25, 2003 Report Posted May 25, 2003 Hmm... Not my work, so I can't come up with a good title, I'm afraid... The only idea I'm getting is to put in some reference to the Blue Pills... But I liked this. The rhyme scheme is interesting. And... I didn't find this terribly sad. Perhaps it's because I write mostly dark poetry. I thought it was a... not happy per se, but certainly not tragic poem. The person decided not to commit suicide. That's cause to be happy, not sad... But I'm done now. Thanks for posting this!
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