Psimon Posted May 22, 2003 Report Posted May 22, 2003 Still ***************** So peaceful No sound to disturb the void No sound at all Anywhere. So very peaceful You would think there would be some sound anything, but no. Nothing I'm alone here Couldn't be more alone than this And that will never change. Just me, alone I won't change either Funny, really, how that can be so But there you have it Or rather, there I have it. So funny I'd laugh if I could, but I can't So I'll cry instead. I can cry in silence. Yes, I can cry in silence, alone in this place Just me and my silent tears So peaceful.
Peredhil Posted May 29, 2003 Report Posted May 29, 2003 Hmmm. Death? Isolation? Deafness? This reads on many levels and none. Speaking it aloud, some parts felt awkward - have you considered a rewrite?
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