Psimon Posted May 22, 2003 Report Posted May 22, 2003 Small **************** Mummy? Please get up, Mummy. Please. Wake up, Mummy. Please. Hurry Mummy. Hurry He's coming back, Mummy. Oh please wake up. Don't leave me here with him, Mummy. Please don't. Mummy? I don't like him, Mummy. He hurt you, Mummy. I got angry at him but I didn't say anything. Cause you love him, don't you Mummy? You said you love him. After you shouted at him and he hit you and you cried and he said he was sorry and you cried and hugged him. You said you loved him, didn't you, Mummy? Mummy? Please wake up. Please. Don't leave me here... alone.
Sorciere Posted May 23, 2003 Report Posted May 23, 2003 Very strong. The repeated use of the word mommy catches you and keeps you there with the child through it all, feeling his fear, great poem.
smallscale_mind_games Posted May 23, 2003 Report Posted May 23, 2003 That has to be one of the more depressing things I've read...to your credit, psimon, I nearly cried.
autumn_sun Posted May 23, 2003 Report Posted May 23, 2003 O_O; woah...at the risk of sounding flaky...deep. You've captured emotion really well here...
Salinye Posted May 24, 2003 Report Posted May 24, 2003 Psimon! BLECH! I hate poems like that! However, it was well written!! ~Salinye
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