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Well I decided I wanted to post this one seperate from my normal list because I am curious what all you have to say about this one.. I have thought and worked, and re-worked much on this one, and I feel its as far as it can go in my eyes. So here it is..

 

The Leave

 

Breathe In.. Breathe out,

One step after another; No looking back now,

Each day starts anew; But the pains stays the same,

There's no escape; World can't stop turning now,

Laying down next your gentle face; The pain flows through my veins like a poison,

Not wanting it to be this way, Thought of loosing you I disavow,

Sweet Dreams are made of you; Satin lips and tender kiss',

Knowing no matter what good I do; What wrongs I right,

The day will still come when I have to depart this wonderful bliss'

Leaving you in the past; Hoping to find you in the future,

Gentle face; How I will miss

Leaving your side.....

Does it have to be this way?

One step in front of another; It's all I can do,

For in my Heart and Soul I know you will stay

Breathe In.. Breathe out,

 

 

PS: I wanna thank Peredhil for helping me a bit on it. Thanks. :)

Posted

You're welcome. I'm sorry I didn't come looking for this until now.

I'd plead busy, but I should've made the time anyway.

 

I still like it, and I think it captures the feeling of the lover fearing to leave.

 

Thought of loosing you I disavow

I think you might have meant "losing" you, but it works well in a clever way as it is - he doesn't want to let her loose, for fear so won't return. It must be difficult to feel so much, in passion's grip to burn.

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