Sorciere Posted May 19, 2003 Report Posted May 19, 2003 “The price is high,” the old man said “Far too high for you” I smiled politely, looking up “Thank you, I’ll have two” “It won’t fit you,” glared the girl “The waist is far too small” I pulled it on and zipped it “Oh no dear, not at all” If all we see is with our eyes Then assumptions surely come But know before you share your voice It’s not the only one
whitenoise Posted May 20, 2003 Report Posted May 20, 2003 I like it. You seem to be a person who lives on their own terms, which is always good. Don't ever do something just because others do it, or because someone tells you to. Nice poem
Vlad Posted May 20, 2003 Report Posted May 20, 2003 Heh - this amuses me. Don't know why... Keep on writing.
smallscale_mind_games Posted May 20, 2003 Report Posted May 20, 2003 Wow! Write more poetry, I really like your stuff! It's such a refreshing perspective!
DL_Snake Posted May 20, 2003 Report Posted May 20, 2003 very very amusing and true. I wish it was longer though, cos it's so nice to read
Sorciere Posted May 22, 2003 Author Report Posted May 22, 2003 Thank you all for your comments, I spend most of my time writing morbid or sad poetry, but it seems that my whimsical ones get the most feedback, maybe someone is trying to tell me something
Nobody of Consequence Posted May 22, 2003 Report Posted May 22, 2003 /me puts on his Gloves of Quibbling Umm, I think the 3rd line/2nd verse was a syllable short, might need 'up' at the end? /me removes Gloves of Quibbling I enjoyed it so much, that I want two poems
Matteo Posted May 22, 2003 Report Posted May 22, 2003 (edited) Magnigfique (sp?) Simple, but true, it's a breath of fresh air to hear those words, so many oare ignorant to their wisdom... but that's just my opinion Edited May 22, 2003 by Matteo
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