Psimon Posted May 15, 2003 Report Posted May 15, 2003 The sea nymph and the sailor ******************************************** Come now, let me hold you, and keep you from the storm. To shelter and enfold you, beneath the waters warm. My lass, she waits ashore. Foul woman, do not tempt me! Your kisses I abhor. I look to home, not thee. Come now, let me hold you, and give to you my love. My comforts to enfold you, beware the world above. My lass, she waits ashore, my bairn upon her knee! Her kisses I adore. I hold to her, not thee. Come now, let me hold you, and shower you with gifts. My pleasure to enfold you, you must consider this. My lass, she waits ashore, she's waiting there for me! I'll tarry here no more. My love's to her, not thee!
Peredhil Posted May 28, 2003 Report Posted May 28, 2003 I liked this, faithful and true he was cleaved fast to she that lived above. Something in the last just doesn't seem to scan - Should it be rather perhaps, "love's" not love?
Psimon Posted May 29, 2003 Author Report Posted May 29, 2003 hmmm indeed you are right (as ever ) 'love's' does read much better. Have adjusted Thanks
Tralla Posted May 29, 2003 Report Posted May 29, 2003 Ohhh I like this. Sorry, can't get any more constructive than that.
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