Psimon Posted May 14, 2003 Report Posted May 14, 2003 Touchdown ****************** Blackness blown apart as countdown reached it's end. Retros fired. An all-consuming flame belched from eyes burned red as hell. Grey bullet did descend through distant heavens without name. Darling, when did we fall? Darling, when was it over? I guess this was the price of falling freely, this twisted metal, this strange sensation, like fire and ice. Both fill my senses keenly. When did we fall? When was it over? This was the price of knowledge, cold, dark void contains me. Did we fall? Was it over? All my senses close me down. We fall... It's over.
Parmenion Posted May 14, 2003 Report Posted May 14, 2003 Reminds me of a song by Sarah McLachan and I like her stuff so liked this too. Appreciation through association.
smallscale_mind_games Posted May 15, 2003 Report Posted May 15, 2003 I really like the sort of reverse pyramid effect you've got going there. So very neat, and has this lovely cold finality.
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