Psimon Posted May 12, 2003 Report Posted May 12, 2003 Youthful **************** The lines around your eyes will lend themselves to tales of laughter past, and times we shared joy's small details. Your body bears the scars of pain, of giving birth. Our children, shooting stars! Can't tell you what they're worth. Their words can score your brow by turns, both harsh and kind. At times you still allow. You just say "Never mind" Grey streaks now race across your auburn locks, and yet ne'er seems to be at loss to brighten silhouette. The years have been unkind to you and, yes, to me. And still you bring to mind how youthful we can be.
Parmenion Posted May 12, 2003 Report Posted May 12, 2003 I like this. I like format and the honesty. Bravo.
Peredhil Posted May 13, 2003 Report Posted May 13, 2003 Heh, the older I get... Funny how the young think that 'sexy' can't be a quality of the old... Pavlovian conditioning works wonders over the years. I enjoyed this immensely.
Gwaihir Posted May 13, 2003 Report Posted May 13, 2003 I don't really like the sound of the word 'details' as the rhyme would, but I love this poem....I always love your stuff, but this is DEFINITELy one of my favorites of yours. There's real meaning and emotion in it.
Matteo Posted May 14, 2003 Report Posted May 14, 2003 I love the ROmantic sentiment of reflection... it always adds something to a poem. Definately worth the read.
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