Shadow of the Butterfly Posted May 12, 2003 Report Posted May 12, 2003 (edited) Maybe life brought seperate lives Apart but now together Tentative tension betwixt two friends Twined in uncertain circumstances Hearts are greedy, fickle and consuming Empathy makes reading eachother interesting What shall happen is still unknown Testing waters of depths disguised White flowers upon cool surfaces Iinstincts muffled, drowned Nearly supressing the urges Souls united but kept apart Objects in the way quite clear Ultimately leading down paths clouded over Like fog in the morning misty forests Searching for answers under our nose Edited May 12, 2003 by Shadow of the Butterfly
Alaeha Posted May 12, 2003 Report Posted May 12, 2003 I like this... particularly the way it flows so that I, at least, can't tell that the initial words were chosen for their starting letter as well as their meaning. Quite nice... Though I'm not sure how the Twin Souls relate to Matthew. *Hugs*
Parmenion Posted May 12, 2003 Report Posted May 12, 2003 (edited) I think she means the Matthew and herself are twin souls The entire poem is about the relationship they both have and if that friendship will blossom into something more and if it does, then the dangers herself and Matthew might face. Course I could be wrong. Either way - another poem I thoroughly enjoyed!! I love the way its written. Edited May 12, 2003 by Parmenion
Amos Greywind Posted May 13, 2003 Report Posted May 13, 2003 I thought it flowed nicly and it was just all around well written. Yet another good one. Amos
Shadow of the Butterfly Posted May 13, 2003 Author Report Posted May 13, 2003 To clear up any confusion.. Matthew is a dear friend of mine... I took an online quiz that stated him as my twin soul. In that same quiz it said that my boyfriend is "the one you love deeply." See, so I'm in a bit of a quandery... feel tugged in two different directions. Which isn't fair to anyone involved.
Parmenion Posted May 13, 2003 Report Posted May 13, 2003 Avoid reading too much into things especially net quizzes If you never had those feelings for Michael before then maybe its good not to place too much emphasis on the quiz thingy.
Alaeha Posted May 13, 2003 Report Posted May 13, 2003 True... I tend, myself, to take internet tests (indeed, most tests) with some amount of salt... That is, I bear in mind at all times that they won't be perfectly accurate, and may in fact be completely wrong. Internet tests are the most notorious of these, but all standardized tests suffer from that problem. They're rather like horoscopes. There may actually be something to some, but for the most part it's best not to take them terribly seriously. Of course, if it was simply reinforcing something that you already believed yourself... That's always kind of neat. But if you need, for some reason, to prove that online tests are often inaccurate... Three of four online IQ tests placed me at about 160, and the other at about 139. I rest my case. *Hugs*
Peredhil Posted May 13, 2003 Report Posted May 13, 2003 Peredhil looks dazed. You mean, all those IQ tests... You DON'T add them up?!? I was up to 98! Sighs. By the way - great poem, great subject, and clever acrostic. It's so cool to watch someone grow as a writer, right before our eyes. One reason I love the Pen so! -P
Matteo Posted May 14, 2003 Report Posted May 14, 2003 I like the style, I've seen it before, but not very often, it realy helps make a poem personal, despite the possibility of an impersonal subject. Great poem, I like the ambiguity of it. Matteo
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