Psimon Posted May 6, 2003 Report Posted May 6, 2003 Gone... **************************** You never can go home again regain what has been lost Be anything but alone, my friend as you stop and count the cost What once was yours is now no more take pause, consider this What once you prized you now abhor the fruit of sustained bliss Those times you counted 'mongst your best the rest had turned to dust And now you've stopped to take your rest yet naught you hold but rust 'What wasted time and wasted life!' they cried at your demise 'What lovely children, faithful wife' If just you'd been more wise!
Peredhil Posted May 6, 2003 Report Posted May 6, 2003 You have a knack with words... I've been wanting to comment on your poems for a while, but given the quality of your work, I didn't want to contrast what you've written with a banal, "nice". But I've simply got to say something because you're posting some really GOOD stuff... Erm. Nicely done?
Alaeha Posted May 6, 2003 Report Posted May 6, 2003 How about very nicely done? Seriously... I rather envy you your ability to pump out what seems like at least a poem a day and maintain this level of quality. And this poem in particular I like a lot... regret over wasted time is never easy to deal with...
Salinye Posted May 6, 2003 Report Posted May 6, 2003 I'd love to hear your thought process behind this one, if you care to share. :0) I don't need to compliment you, you know I"m a psimon fan! ~Salinye
Thinas Posted May 6, 2003 Report Posted May 6, 2003 (edited) If one ignores the fact that there's a wife and children, the poem reminds me of Gollum's fate and state of mind. It's probably because I've listened to the lyrics of "Gollum's Song" on the Lord of the Rings: The Two Towers soundtrack, but I seem to recognize the hopelessness and the loss of time expressed on the poem. I second the words that are already spoken. It's a pearl. Well done. /Thinas the Darkelf\ Edited May 6, 2003 by Thinas
Psimon Posted May 7, 2003 Author Report Posted May 7, 2003 Well now you've made me blush... Thank you for your comments... You've made a happy man very old... er, I mean, an old man very happy I must admit I seem to be bursting with them at the moment. Or perhaps I've just taken the time to sit down and write. As for the quality of the work... well... To share my thought process... hmmmmmm..... well...... Thinas, as ever my dark-elf friend, you've nailed it. It is about a man so consumed by desire for something (in this case my thoughts were more along the lines of illicit drugs - not dissimilar to Gollum's craving/addiction), so consumed by it that he has lost all he had - family, possessions.. everything. And now he is alone and bitter and broken. Such a happy tale, neh? Thank you again... Your acceptance of my offerings makes me very happy indeed
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