Psimon Posted May 6, 2003 Report Posted May 6, 2003 Not to blame *********************** You ran a yellow light He ran a red no blame on you tonight two women dead The fear that you felt as you waited to hear You prayed as you knelt and hoped comfort was near The other is charged with it, sure to go down. But could you have changed a bit if only you'd known.
Ayshela Posted May 6, 2003 Report Posted May 6, 2003 ohhhhh... ouch. mechanically - i like the way you set the rhythm for this, you effectively capture the combined feel of racing to catch the light and the cut-short impact. you've definitely got a feeling of mixed fear and guilt contrasting legal blamelessness. That's a difficult burden to bear and tangled threads to sort out. kind of makes you wish you could see a few seconds into the future. *hugs*
Salinye Posted May 6, 2003 Report Posted May 6, 2003 Sorry to be unoriginal, but I mirror Ashyla's comments. Nice job, Psimon!! ~Salinye
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