Ayshela Posted April 30, 2003 Report Posted April 30, 2003 Lying beside you, my head on your chest, I feel desirable - like a dishrag, limp with use. Lying beside you, curled under your arm, I feel sheltered - like a mouse in a wind tunnel. Lying beside you, tucked safe in your bed, I feel wanted - like an elephant, white and pristine.
smallscale_mind_games Posted April 30, 2003 Report Posted April 30, 2003 Yowch! Stinging irony! Very well done. I feel so juvenile in comparison, being forcefully reminded of how much younger I am than many of you Pen-children.
Ayshela Posted April 30, 2003 Author Report Posted April 30, 2003 heyheyhey... i'm not *that* old!!! well, just because my oldest is probably about your age...
smallscale_mind_games Posted April 30, 2003 Report Posted April 30, 2003 I wasn't trying to imply that you're ancient! But I feel so dreadfully immature! I mean, I'm over here talking to people online, and you're-oh wait, you're doing that too. Nevermind...but still, I feel pointless and juvenile! (ya think it might be 'cause I AM a pointless juvenile?)
Salinye Posted May 3, 2003 Report Posted May 3, 2003 I LOVE the use of analogies!! I especially like the first verse!! Thank you for sharing!! ~Salinye
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