WrenWind Posted April 25, 2003 Report Posted April 25, 2003 (edited) The sun never shines here darkness is all curled in the corner back to the door Don't turn on the light I don't want to come out Stop knocking on the door I'm not ready You opened the door anyway a flood of light precedes Lifted from the floor carried out into the day held close to your heart I feel safe The sun beats down on me a warm summer breeze my covering gently removed How did you know it was time? blood pumping filling out wings! I have wings Revel in the light gossamer wings shine delighted flight You knew and released me Fly with me now the light beckons Edited May 9, 2003 by WrenWind
Salinye Posted April 26, 2003 Report Posted April 26, 2003 Wow Wren, how did I miss this? I really like this, however, I'm speculating several different meanings. Care to share your thought pattern? ~Salinye
WrenWind Posted April 26, 2003 Author Report Posted April 26, 2003 I started with a mind picture of a woman/butterfly and I was in an odd mood since I can't turn them into visual art I wrote it down instead I sometimes wish I could paint *sighs*
Peredhil Posted April 27, 2003 Report Posted April 27, 2003 you do paint, Hun, just with words in our minds...
gjunon Posted April 27, 2003 Report Posted April 27, 2003 nice visuals on the poem great job i can imagine your painting very nice
Tattered Posted May 9, 2003 Report Posted May 9, 2003 Beautiful! That stark contrast from darkness to freedoms light! I have had times when I felt just the same- shut away, unwilling to shine. Then someone comes along to release me. Too bad it doesn't happen everytime. I am curious to know the story behind this one...
Parmenion Posted May 12, 2003 Report Posted May 12, 2003 This is excellent. Its the kind of poem you have to read carefully to catch all the nuances...very well worked. Very well thought through and very well paced.
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