Tattered Posted April 22, 2003 Report Posted April 22, 2003 Like a single drop of rain From a quiet moonlit sky Separating as it meets the ground Evaporating shortly there after I feel translucent to the world I am isolated and alone Completely torn apart, misunderstood Every effort to improve, dissapates As the morning dew burns off into the day I feel spurts of anger that soon float away Constantly revisiting my secret fustrations Exhausted from the simplicities of living Crippled, I run twice as fast to keep up Betrayed in every opportunity for trust So afraid and so confused Which direction is up? No recognitions for my feeble efforts No relief from my shattered existance So tired from this gainless battle
Salinye Posted April 23, 2003 Report Posted April 23, 2003 Tattered~ Another heart felt poem! Thank you for sharing. I hope it wasn't written about how you are currently feeling. However, if it is, please accept this BIG HUG from me. :0) Also, I only see one correction needed, opportunity was mispelled. :0) (yeah yeah don't look at my most recent poem posted it's a gramatical night mare lol) I look forward to reading more! ~Salinye Fixed any spelling I saw, anything I missed? - Peredhil
Tasslehoff Posted April 23, 2003 Report Posted April 23, 2003 Another well written poem Tattered. You have so much raw emotio. Its trully amazing
Peredhil Posted April 24, 2003 Report Posted April 24, 2003 The balance between solitude and lonliness. Individuality and isolation. Belonging or being absorbed. Personally, I'm often loneliest in a crowd, but I like how you took it deeper than the superficial 'me' focus to ask, "Who am I?" What a powerful question - how do I define myself? As a relationship? Father, Husband, Son, Friend? As a label? Male, Soldier, Poet? Or in some other way. How important are the labels with which we define ourselves and our boundaries... Thought provoking work on a training day. Good job.
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