DoomGaze Posted April 15, 2003 Report Posted April 15, 2003 Flower of Lost Hopes ---------------------------------------- Skyscrapers to the creatures below, Swaying from side to side, Their beauty they bestow, Opening your eyes so wide. I reach out to one, To hold it within my grasp. Pedals coloured crimson, With it's beauty, you gasp. Lovely lovely flower, Will you win her heart for me? If you do, teach me this power, So I can hold onto her for an eternity. The time has come my little friend, Show me some of your magic. And please do not fail me again, Hopefully this time, it won't be so tragic.
Vlad Posted April 16, 2003 Report Posted April 16, 2003 I hate to do it, but... awwwwwwwwwwwwww how cute!
Peredhil Posted April 17, 2003 Report Posted April 17, 2003 nicely done. admittedly I was reading quickly, but in a few spots, I had mental stuttering on the meter. For example, in the second stanza my mind wanted to turn "To hold it within my grasp." into "To hold within my grasp." Might just be a me-thing though. It's been a long day. A long day - but your poem brightened it. Thank you for posting.
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