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Would they notice

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If the dishes were done

the laundry clean ,folded and put away

the dog walked

the floors washed

the booboo kissed

lunches made

a warm body in the bed

Would they notice

the glass that was missing

the fist of wrinkles in one shirt

the broken glass in the garbage

my bandaged hand

the tears on the pillow

 

 

Maybe they will when i'm gone

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Unfortunately, not many seem to comfort the comforters in my experience. This poem strikes a chord with me, as I've wondered about this same thing often.

 

...Yet, I have to wonder why this bothers me so much. After all, if my motivation for doing these things is to help, then I have achieved what I set out to achieve. Perhaps after all I am being selfish, doing good deeds to attempt to gain attention. In the end, I find that helping others really must be a selfless thing to be worth much.

 

And what they will not notice when you are present will do no more good for them to notice if you are gone.

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Where is your validation?

 

In a spouse? Children? Friends? God? Where ever you put your validating influence, you will pursue.

 

As a parent of children who occasionally act like hotel room guests (you mean, laundry DOESN'T do itself?) I can sometimes relate to the feelings you've expressed.

 

Well written.

 

I'D miss you.

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*nod*

all my life the only things anyone noticed were those which i did not do.

you've said it so well!

perhaps, if someone else feels it too, i'm not as crazy as i sometimes feel, to wish in random moments to be more than a mere drudge?

thank you.

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I, for one, would most certainly notice (but I could be a little biased, neh? ;) )

 

A beautiful piece from a beautiful person :wub:

 

My earnest reply (if I were priviledged enough to have the opportunity):

Would they notice

....

the tears on the pillow

dried on my skin as I hold you close in repentence

my bandaged hand

wet from my tears of regret

the broken glass in the garbage

retrieved as a reminder to me of how I let you down

the fist of wrinkles in one shirt

ironed away as I ponder your selfless efforts

the glass that was missing

replaced by a crystal rose

Would they notice

Yes...

a warm body in the bed

and to bask in the warmth of your heart

lunches made

enjoyed knowing the soft hands that prepared the meal

the booboo kissed

the gentleness of your smile

the floors washed

walking barefoot to your side

the dog walked

together, so glad to share nature's beauty with you

the laundry clean ,folded and put away

again, together as I listen to you share your thoughts and emotions

If the dishes were done

after I had cooked you a meal, run your bath, and warmed the massage oils...

 

I would notice.

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