Damon Inferel Posted March 28, 2003 Report Posted March 28, 2003 (edited) Meow! I wrote another random poem... I really wish that these were planned ahead of time, it would cut back on the time it takes to write them. But it's worth the time to see my dear beloved smile. Anyhow... it has something to do with my idolization of my darling girlfriend, and how I keep myself quiet... I think. I don't really know what it's about. Here it is... A poem, ‘tis a sonnet of sorts, The rhyming words are my cohorts. Writing a poem like this in my usual fashion, There is the attempt to add a hint of passion. Words that speak of surreal beauty, To vocalize them is not my duty. I keep them treasured inside my mind, Until ‘tis the surface of paper they find. Chicken scrawl or typed word, The words of compliments seem absurd. But I write them anyhow, As I know only silence, my solemn vow. I could only write about one so gentle and fair, Both in heart and appearance, and so full of care. Soft brown eyes and a lovely warm smile, Most else concealed by her secretive style. Among all else she has a wonderful voice, Occasionally she sings by choice. A marvel, a treat, a delicacy of song, And for what of the lyrics she knows, her words are never wrong. A bit of idolization I suppose, But nothing else does my mind propose. In the end, all seems well, I balance the thoughts in my mind and what I should tell. I’ll treasure her as perfect on paper and in my head, But my spoken words will stay mostly dead. A compliment or two when I have courage and when it’s right, Such beauty and wonder that seems so bright. I promised to love her forever, and so I will, All of her dreams and goals… I hope to help her fulfill. Edited March 28, 2003 by Damon Inferel
Elwen Posted March 31, 2003 Report Posted March 31, 2003 *walks out of the shadows in time to hear her beloved speak this poem about her. The elf maiden blushes.* This is a wonderful poem, ashke...but I am not that wonderful. That's the only thing that /I/ find wrong with it.
Alaeha Posted March 31, 2003 Report Posted March 31, 2003 Elwen, don't try and tell him that you're not wonderful. Trust me, you are to him. I've the same problem. I try and deny it when I'm told how "special" I am, and I can't get anywhere at all. (But I'm not) Of course, the reverse is also true. It's a good poem. In terms of the form... the meter is rough (could be improved with a bit of rewording... ) but that's it for complaints. Certainly can't criticize the content.
Rune Posted April 10, 2003 Report Posted April 10, 2003 awwwwwwww! So cute! Rune giggles and runs around the two of them clapping. Its so interesting to see someone idolize someone and not constantly throw it in their face. I think thats my problem at times, when I idolize someone I really really want them to know and half of the time it scares them off! This is a great poem. Its true to the heart and touching and well written in my opinon.
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