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Tender moments

 

over time and space we collect them

 

moments in time that are frozen in our memmories

 

a smile, a tear a sweet note

 

an eyelash brushed softly off a sleeping cheek

 

"I love you" whispered in the dark

 

little things remembered and stored

 

babies laughter

 

infectious bubbling wonderful

 

silly cartoons shared with a child

 

gather them, savour them

 

hold them close to your heart

 

these moments are what life is all about

Posted

Wow. That's the truth... no question about it. It's those moments that you wish you could keep for a lifetime that make life worth living.

 

Very nice. One request though, if you decide to edit it... Could you perhaps reformat it a little so that you don't have the whole thing double-spaced? Silly, I know, but nonetheless, it bothered me a bit. It made it look like each line was it's own stanza...

 

Perhaps I'm only bringing it up because I cannot, myself, find anything else to complain about. Whether that's the case or not, however, is much like the question about tootsie pops. The world may never know.

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Its really beautiful and a statement about life that should not be over looked. With all the eye candy and technology to keep us busy nowadays..I wonder if people go through life without realizing those things that you captured so well in your poem.

 

I agree that the formatting is a bit strange. Kind of mademe stumble over it a bit.

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