Wyvern Posted March 26, 2003 Report Posted March 26, 2003 Spread your wings my broken dove Of shattered glass composed The fragments sharp, contorted art Entice forgotten woes Raise your beak my little love A twisted metal snare To sing the tune, distorted loon Spite screeches in the air Turn your eyes forsaken one Those melted crimson beads Of plastic worn, embedded scorn And artificial needs Lift a claw you tattered bird Barbed wire's twisted form To cut and scrape, to mutilate To nourish hungry worm Take flight, O wretched winged hope! These hands that bled and built Shall watch your ghastly form soar high While trembling with guilt Yet efforts wrought and endless shame Stop not the scalding sun And faith rebuilt with horrid guilt Becomes Icarus Undone.
Tralla Posted March 26, 2003 Report Posted March 26, 2003 *stands, cheers, claps and stomps her feet* I love the rhythm, and the internal rhyme in each stanza. And the imagery... Oooh. Great. Woo. Hm, what else... Ah, I'll leave else to others.
DoomGaze Posted March 26, 2003 Report Posted March 26, 2003 go away Wyv!! This is my domain!! Just Kidding!! This poem is great and i have to agree, great rhythm.. Love your work, post more!
Archaneus Posted March 27, 2003 Report Posted March 27, 2003 Great job, Wyv. You're just like me, quality over quantitiy.
Mira Posted August 7, 2004 Report Posted August 7, 2004 Despite this poems failure to make it onto the Pen Recomends list Mira, is totally amazed at the subtile power displayed here. "Some people just don't get great poetry", he mutters shaking his head, and at that moment an idea pops into his mind. Quickly, when no one is looking, he adds this beautiful poem onto the Super Secret Mira Recomends List
Zadown Posted August 7, 2004 Report Posted August 7, 2004 I'm pretty sure the people voting 'no' were using Almost Draconic Web-Browser and were actually trying to vote 'yes'. What goes around comes around... x_X
WrenWind Posted August 9, 2004 Report Posted August 9, 2004 Wow!! This is by far one of the best poems I have read here. Well done.
Crichon Posted August 10, 2004 Report Posted August 10, 2004 Wow, that is really awesome. Great job Wyvern. I remember when I was thinking about writing a poem or perhaps a song about Icarus, but at the time, it didn't fit into what I wanted to write. And I can honestly say, I don't have to attempt one now, because you already crafted a great piece.
Salinye Posted August 11, 2004 Report Posted August 11, 2004 Uhg, I wish I would have read this before the voting was over. It's one of the finest pieces of poetry I've read. Kudos to you, sir almost dragon, ~Salinye
BlackCagedHeart Posted August 26, 2004 Report Posted August 26, 2004 I want to weep....It's SO BEAUTIFUL! ::standing ovation:: ::bows head:: You are magnificant. I'm BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAACK!
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