Nyyark Posted March 19, 2003 Report Posted March 19, 2003 Sun bleeding on the horizon Staining the bare earth crimson red Casting looming shadows From dried husks that once were Gateways to darkness Growing larger as the light drains Feeding on the earth Sipping the Sun's life A scorched tree Clutching the dying orb Enshrined in blood Lacerating the last light An undeniable void Consuming the world Filling the mind It all fades away.
Ethics Gradient Posted March 19, 2003 Report Posted March 19, 2003 I enjoyed this. The image that I paint in my mind of a beautiful sunset is offset by the sadness of the words of your poem. I liked the contrast Thank you for sharing this.
Archaneus Posted March 19, 2003 Report Posted March 19, 2003 Great. One of the most descriptive poems I've seen about the sun's cycle yet. Good work.
Zariah Posted March 20, 2003 Report Posted March 20, 2003 I find the imagery quite vivid and unique. I appeciate the mood created by word selection and change from describing the sun as bleeding into the horizon to being void as it fades away... It has an interperative tone. I think personally it is sad, but I could also see other variations of interpertation on the emotional effect which this poem conveys. Excellent Nyyark!
Rune Posted April 9, 2003 Report Posted April 9, 2003 A sunset is often proclaimed to be one of the most beautiful things on earth to witness with the naked eye. In this poem it becomes a solemn and eerie event where the sunlight bathing the land is compared to blood drenching a cloth to a degree. It is very descriptive and intense. It is also the perfect length in my opinion, because of the graphic nature of the poem.. If it were too long it would become overpowering. I have not had a chance to read a ton of your work but so far I’m very impressed. Hopefully there are some others I haven’t seen yet and will get to today.
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