Blondemoon Posted March 11, 2003 Report Posted March 11, 2003 Ok, as I was getting ready for work, with water heating for a cup of tea, I suddenly decided that I was going to post some of my older work. Well, I've got two to post, but one will just have to wait until later, since I've only got time to post one. So here I sit, in my ugly ugly work shirt, drinking my tea, and waiting for my car to warm up. I'll type this as it was originally written, with the exception of grammatical and spelling errors. Untitled In and out, In and out, Such is the way I fade. Moments of brilliance, prelude to dark. Fading, fading, fading, Lifes blood flows from my wounds. Wounds of bitterness, wounds of hate. Wounds well concealed, oozing. Yellow-green pus streams from my wounds, yet no one sees. Too well hidden am I. H.M. 2-3-1998
Peredhil Posted March 11, 2003 Report Posted March 11, 2003 The Poem of Dorian Gray! More seriously, I think a lot of people go to great lengths to avoid exposing their inner wounds to the world. Sometimes letting in the light is the only way you can heal.
reverie Posted March 12, 2003 Report Posted March 12, 2003 except for the yellow-green pus part... i like it... kinda too vivid... rev...
Blondemoon Posted March 13, 2003 Author Report Posted March 13, 2003 Yeah, the yellow-green pus was kinda too vivid. Even I was cringing when I was typing that out. And this one, well, it's not an old one, and it's not depressing either. I wrote it at work. Figured I might as well post it in here. down upon me like the Harpies they swoop each one screaming "I want my discount!" with foul teeth and reeking of urine they storm down one after another a continuous stream, the very picture of impatience screeching "I want paper!" and god forbid you don't more fast enough "c'mon already!" they cry human vultures every one and why? it's senior citizen Tuesday. And believe me, it was hellish.
whynotsin Posted March 13, 2003 Report Posted March 13, 2003 I get the same feeling when ppl are like NOW NOW NOW< GIVE ME IT NOW. My Computers messed up do something about it.
Tasslehoff Posted March 13, 2003 Report Posted March 13, 2003 lol. That was so funny. Makes me think of my grandpa!
Rune Posted March 13, 2003 Report Posted March 13, 2003 *giggles* To think of the elderly as harpies! That is just too good. Society teaches us that we should view the elderly respectably no matter what the case and as such most people who tackle the subject will always write something nice and respectful. I find it refreshing that you described it as you experienced it.
Blondemoon Posted March 13, 2003 Author Report Posted March 13, 2003 Well, here is the other old poem that I promised to post two days ago. Yeah, I'm a procrastinator. Again, this is typed the way it was written. Less than five months to go, and I wonder what it'll be like. Not to see my friends everyday, and not to laugh at them or with them when they do something stupid. I don't want high school to end, now that we're so close. A little piece of me dies every day graduation comes closer. I've become more prone to tears, thinking back to times both good and bad, when we were so supportive of one another. We've all grown close, and in our last months together, I want to see them everyday and share with them special moments of laughter and tears. I don't want it to end... so I cry. 1-25-98 And holy crap that sucked. Hmmm...might have to try for a rewrite, if possible. On a side note, I still have almost all of the friends that the poem is about, even though we're not as close as we all were. Life will do that. <_<
Blondemoon Posted March 13, 2003 Author Report Posted March 13, 2003 LOL! but they were harpies! I swear!! anyone who has worked in retail and lived through a senior citizen day probably can agree. And they honestly did say that...even though most of them were nice. aside from the ones who got mad when my register locked up...or when somebody forgot she wanted a carton of cigs, then had to write a new check (that was the "c'mon already" lady). I got all sorts of dirty looks.
Rune Posted March 13, 2003 Report Posted March 13, 2003 Hey! You graduated the same year I did. And I like the poem, its just a casual poem written at a tough time. I think it portrays the feelings of leaving very well.
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