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(This is a work in progress,it all takes place on a planet named Masa Duna. If you would like to knwo more about Masa Duna email me)

 

 

 

Of all of the many great races of Masa Duna,the great Serpahs are spoken of only slightly. The great race which named the planet Great earth in there langue is only spoken of in the beguning of its' history. Why is that? How can one race seem to vanish out of history? The anser is simple,the Seraoh's themselfs vainished from Masa Duna. The greatest race known to the planet was killed out in a matter of years. Why? How? These are the questions you may ask,and I could give you the simple answer the textbooks give,but I beieve that isn't enough. T truely understand the reasons,and the affests of the disapperance of the Seraphs. You must see it from a Seraph's eyes. Throught the eyes of the only seraph that surivied,through the eyes of the only Seraph that can never die. Little is writen about the Seraph,but even little more is writen about Vincent Silver,he only survior,but now both will be leaned about. Listen and hear the grand history of Masa Duna through the eyes of the man who lived it. Throught the eyes of Vincent Silver,through my eyes....

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(I will write more tommoro,please tell me what you think!)

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(Sorry this is long overdue! The story swiches to thrid person now,jst telling you so you don't get confused)

 

The sun peaked over the hirson and began to send it's bright beams of light through the small village of Serpah. Th evillage aptly named after it's inhabitants,the angelics known as the Serpahs. The people of the town sowly began to stir but one young seraph was alreay awake. His name was Vincent Silver,he sat amiring the sun rise,the beams of light bouncing and reflecting off his silver hair. He yawned and screched his wings as he stood up.

"Today...I start training." The young man spoke to his-self in a wisper.

"Indeed you do my boy!" Vincent heard his father's voice behind him. He quickly turned and looked at him with a smile. His father was large man standing 6'3 with a large build. He was obiously a warrior,but his dark green eyes showed that he to was human,or seraph.

"Can't believe my baby boy is a man now..." His father said his voice half pround and half sad.

"Dad,I'm not a kid,you can't call me your baby. I'm grown now,I'm going to train to be like you a royal knight of Lindson."

"Well come on' your mother is cooking,We'll talk abou ti over Breakfast."

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seems pretty interesting, although there are many spelling errors, i can still read your work (to me it looks like your first language is French) love to see more. For some reason, this reminds me of The Legend of Dragoon, where Lavitz looks up to his father and becomes a knight for his kingdom..(thats just me thinking that)

Anywho, continue this story!

 

Thx, DoomGaze,

 

~-=Like A Shadow, I Will Be With You Until The End Of Time=-~

Edited by DoomGaze
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Vincent,

 

it seems like you're off to an interesting beginning with this story. Although it does have it's share of spelling errors, it doesn't really take away from the actual story itself. (And spelling is just something that improves with time, right?) Anyways, so far I don't have a lot to say about this story, but I will comment more as it expands. It looks like you're going in an interesting direction with your character here, and I'll be looking forward to reading more ^.^

 

Keep up the good effort, and don't give up on this one! (Not implying you were going to or anything... :P )

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