Alaeha Posted March 9, 2003 Report Posted March 9, 2003 Wrote this around January 24th... Not quite sure of the date. I'd need to go through old email to be sure. To understand why I wrote it, you'd need to know this: I wrote this the day after I told someone who means more than the world to me how I felt about her, and I wasn't yet sure how she would respond. And I was absolutely terrified that I had driven her away. Redemption Loss bites me deeply, these twisted, cruel blades that rip out my heart with a jerk. Tears fill my vision, the real world fades, and I see hordes of demons who lurk. just out of my vision, these horrors abound, I know that they're there, where no light can be found. And Light is in hiding, among all these dead, for no one can see in this land in my head. Surrounded by demons that strike from within while showing themselves here, without. I flail around madly, I'm praying to win e'en a clue to what this is about. Then a bright, shining pillar appears in my sight, it cuts through the darkness and banishes night. The dead leave my vision, the world I can view, three words find my tongue, and I say "I love you." These three words, I think, are worth more than my art, To say that "I love you" or give you my heart. A great risk to say, for it may take toll. If you leave me, you take with you part of my soul.
Zariah Posted March 10, 2003 Report Posted March 10, 2003 (edited) This is very saddening. It is well-written and I love the rhyme and repetition of "I love you" from 4th to 5th paragraphs...it's well wrapped. It even has cadance and rythm. Go Alaeha! Edited March 10, 2003 by Zariah
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