DoomGaze Posted March 3, 2003 Report Posted March 3, 2003 (edited) Dream World ------------------------------------- I look outside a stained glass window, Beautiful colours dance in the air. The light shines hard, but emits a faint glow, And I lose myself, as I start to stare. I think about the good times, and the bad, Thinking about the future, what lies ahead. Will it be good, happy and not sad? With memories that can never be dead? I get lost, wondering where I am, Lost in my own dream world. Looking behind, the door slams As I begin to watch my life unfurl. Edited March 14, 2003 by DoomGaze
Peredhil Posted March 14, 2003 Report Posted March 14, 2003 I think I'd make "stain" into "stained" in the first stanza. I like this one, but then, I'm a bit of a dreamer. The past is a shut door indeed, to be remembered and from which we learn, but never revisited. The future unfolds before us, beckoning or intimidating, but coming none-the-less. All we can do is make our plans and then live in the only moment we have - Now. Great job. -Peredhil
Tasslehoff Posted March 14, 2003 Report Posted March 14, 2003 Interesting concept Jeff. Often I have looked out the window wondering who I am, or where I am going.. Its most likely during a lightning, cause I think those are awesome, but back on track.. Great job man
DoomGaze Posted March 14, 2003 Author Report Posted March 14, 2003 Thx for pointing that error out... i fix it... you could imagine what 7 3/4 hours can do to you at work you think alot..
Rune Posted March 18, 2003 Report Posted March 18, 2003 Hmm, interesting concept..to think of the future as a window and the past as a door. Even more interesting is to think of the future as a stained glass window..because to me it reminds me of a sort of warped image that is colorful and bright when in reality behind the glass is the same things as a normal window. Also to consider light as society or even an uncontrollable force such as an accident or someone who has direct control over you life. The light warps the image through stained glass window..either creating a nice effect with colors and graphic intensity (something good happening) or a negative effect like hurting your eyes or whatnot (something bad happening). Great poem, Thank you for sharing! (TYFS!)
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