Passionsrejected05 Posted March 1, 2003 Report Posted March 1, 2003 Your sitting in a room. Black as night. Cold as hell. All you can hear is your heart pounding, It sounds like a thousand steps racing through your mind. A flash of silver sails through the black. Cold Sharp Sweet fulfilling You watch the juice of life start to flow. One drip at a time, Then more, Drip, Drip, Drip. Isn't it beautiful, You can't stop, You want more, More, More, Release the pressure. Everything starts getting fuzzy, The world hazy, You heart beat is getting fainter, Fainter, Then there is silence. Was it worth it?
Peredhil Posted March 14, 2003 Report Posted March 14, 2003 First off, I'm really happy to hear that you don't feel like this any more! Cause you captured the way you felt very well in this - enough to silence the feedback from readers, and make most comments seem too banal or trivial to post. I remember a time in my life, many many years ago, when I felt so badly inside, emotionally, that I was mentally feeling disconnected from my body and life. It was as if the intensitiy and magnitude of the emotion were a sound so loud it left me deaf to anything quieter - and all lesser feelings were mute before it. So I felt so much - I was numb. Oxymoron, right? Anyway, I remember poking my leg with a needle, because in some strange internal logic, the phyisical pain put me back in my body and counter-balanced the inner pain. Reading this piece, which captured a mood and feeling so well, brought back the memory of that moment and time. so I'm grateful - that I'm looking back on it. And I applaud the courage of you writing what you'd felt openly buy without hidden pleas, just stating what was. Well done. Hugs -Peredhil
Rune Posted March 18, 2003 Report Posted March 18, 2003 Suicide poems tend to be one in a thousand. I think because most of us go through the struggle of is life worth living at least once in our lives. This one on the other hand was impressive not only because of the imagery and emotion that can be felt through it which seems to make the act of death to be something grand..but the final statement which suddenly snaps the reader back to reality and the end result of the act. Amazing as always. ^__^ Thank you for Sharing! (TYFS!)
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