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The Pen is Mightier than the Sword

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the game we play,

provides us with the strength,

to test our own sanity,

can you keep up with me now,

Im finally ahead of your plan,

completely done with you,

no more tricks; no more lies,

seeing the truth among a few,

sadness escapes me; no more watery eyes,

there is a new me in this new world,

with new hope and regenerated wings I fly,

exploring all that is new

 

 

I know its not great, and it doesnt flow well, but its a start, needed to write it donw atleast, before I lost the paper.

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Well, I like is Tas. Do you mind if I call you that? So used to Tasslehoff being called Tas from the books. ^_^ Anyhow. I like that poem. It flows nicely how it is, in my opinion at least.

 

Kokuryuu grins a silver-white fanged grin and claps

 

Nice work!

 

-Ryuu :dragon4:

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I like it.

It does get choppy at times, but overall it's fine.

I enjoyed the theme of this poem, creating a sense of dignity.

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