Deadly Nightshade Posted February 23, 2003 Report Posted February 23, 2003 Is there really a heaven? Is there really a hell? Or us all this made up To keep us in line? Can we reach Nirvana Or is Nirvana Just the breaking point In sanity They say in Afghanistan When you die. You get 70 virgins Then why is that the person saying this Is not dying for there country? I wonder if I will ever know these questions Maybe I will Maybe I wont... I guess I will never know..Untill I die Or go utterly Insane
Archaneus Posted February 23, 2003 Report Posted February 23, 2003 I like the questions presented, but this doesn't really sound like a poem to me. You should look at it and think of a way you could make it flow more. Can we reach Nirvana Or is Nirvana Just the breaking point In sanity If that's the case I think I have reached Nirvana. Hehehe.
DoomGaze Posted February 23, 2003 Report Posted February 23, 2003 lol @ archaneus, this is actually a neat subject to do it on, but i agree with Arc, it need a better flow to it..
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