Rune Posted February 20, 2003 Report Posted February 20, 2003 (edited) A very simple title. (Written on Feb 20, at 7:40 AM) The sun breaks the night the moon cries as it licks it's mortal wounds decending into the light it disappears as the sun overpowers its feeble aura. The solar king reigns until it too has tired from it's duties decending to it's resting place as the foolish moon takes the stage. Reborn the moon dances amid the cloudy subjects of the sky kingdom the star children cheer on the jester in it's light they twinkle with mischief. But the sun breaks the night after its long and peaceful slumber and the children are reformed as they fade from normal view. And the solar king reigns from a heavenly throne on high until another day. Another cycle in it's life. Edited February 20, 2003 by Rune
Rune Posted February 20, 2003 Author Report Posted February 20, 2003 and yes i know the moon does appear during the day.. its symbolic >___>
Peredhil Posted February 20, 2003 Report Posted February 20, 2003 nice symbolism. I think I'd rather be a stars and moon guy.
Tasslehoff Posted February 20, 2003 Report Posted February 20, 2003 Rune, once again a most amazing poem from my favorite 3 foot tall demoness!!
Archaneus Posted February 21, 2003 Report Posted February 21, 2003 I liked this one a lot. I have always liked poems that deal with nature. Great job.
Cyril Darkcloud Posted February 21, 2003 Report Posted February 21, 2003 Movement follows hard upon movement and day follows hard upon night and time is made and measured and marked by the motion of bodies that shine in the sky. The movements of life likewise are parceled into the sensible daylight of movement and work and the slumbering night time of rest, from waking to resting to waking again pacing the steady, relentless erasure of darkness by light and the draining of light into dark. A very well-chosen theme to build a poem around, Rune – there’s something about the regular and measured cycling of sun and moon which seems particularly well-suited to verse. It’s easy to forget in this age of electric lights and often sleepless nights that for the bulk of human history the cycles and movements of human life were shaped to accord with these same movements of sun and moon. You take an intriguing approach here to the contrast between night and day that goes beyond simply being the difference between dark and light and it might be worth trying to sharpen that a bit. Thanks for sharing such a creative piece of writing – it’s a fun read.
Rune Posted February 21, 2003 Author Report Posted February 21, 2003 Thanks for the nice comments guys. I appreciate it.
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