Deadly Nightshade Posted February 19, 2003 Report Posted February 19, 2003 I sit in my room and waste away As do you in your grave What I did is now done I cannot take it back Would I if I had the chance? Problily not Everyday you came out With your bright smile Where you even human? You never shed a tear I never understood Why you where so happy So one night I came to your room With a knife in hand It was I killed the happyness It was I killed you And now I sit in my room No one know who did it But me....
Archaneus Posted February 19, 2003 Report Posted February 19, 2003 Wow. I'm frightened, Nightshade. (not really, but hey) Good job.
HopperWolf Posted February 19, 2003 Report Posted February 19, 2003 good POV piece. of course, if it's not a pov, and is a analogy for your grim affect on a person who become close to you (also came to mind) then it is equally as good. The use of language is effective for both purposes and I am totally wrong aren't I? but hey, that's what I see. care to enlighten?
reverie Posted February 20, 2003 Report Posted February 20, 2003 ...reminds me of lady Mcbeth after she killed the king... well the first and last stanza do... The 2nd stanza actually kinda of funny to me... it's like a yelling "what your so @#%@#$ happy about, die" reminds of me of blogger i used to know... revery the dreamlost "out damn spot" (McBeth, shakespear) the dream continues...
Justin Silverblade Posted February 20, 2003 Report Posted February 20, 2003 Grim, dark, poetry. Thanks for sharing.
Nyyark Posted February 20, 2003 Report Posted February 20, 2003 Nice job, you should post more poetry
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