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I don't think I'll ever understand

what she seems to think and plan

I swear, one day you'll be the death of me

This high elation and bottomless misery

So beautiful, so fine, so fair

 

I don't think I'll ever see what's

truly there

Because I am incomplete, an

unfinished whole

When we are joined, that's when I'll

know the joy of true levels of ecstasy

and imagination in life

For a half cannot do what can a whole

When we stand, man and wife

 

EDIT:

When I'd originally posted this, I'd inluded the opening lines:

It's alright-

She moves in a mysterious way...

 

Which I later realized in fact belong to U2. Gah. ><

 

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A very good poem, Ozymandias. The themes of man being incomplete without woman and the struggle of finding a mate are both clearly depicted. I particularly liked the use of antithesis between "high elation" and "bottomless misery", which could reflect the conflicting emotions people experience in love. I also liked the use of spacing in the lines of the third stanza and the way you ended the poem.

 

One thing I'm curious about: why did you choose to start the poem with the line "It's alright-"? I find it an intriguing way of starting it... is it perhaps used by the narrator to reassure himself of his emotions?

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One thing I'm curious about: why did you choose to start the poem with the line "It's alright-"? I find it an intriguing way of starting it... is it perhaps used by the narrator to reassure himself of his emotions?

probably he had it with her *lol* j/k =)

 

it's a beautiful poem, and in some ways reflect how true love can last. Your partner must have some quality, something in which you can't stand, and other things in which you cannot understand, and pratically drive other crazy... the continious drive of joining but struggling at the same time is the true expression of a loving husband/wife relationship. The protrayed happy american family is just a lie.

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