Archaneus Posted February 16, 2003 Report Posted February 16, 2003 I wrote this the other day after a series of events that really had me pissed and this just sort of popped inot my head. Hope you like. Seething inside I can feel it stirring Growing like a parasite And I don't care I want to decimate I want to destroy This emotion The strongest one It's growing
Degenero Angelus Posted February 16, 2003 Report Posted February 16, 2003 Hmm... wonder what this could be about.. Good stuff, at any rate.
Zariah Posted February 16, 2003 Report Posted February 16, 2003 I think this could be a bit more powerful, if you used stronger adjectives... perhaps a bit more explosive. I like it though. Suggestion: Do not repeat the work growing at the end...used a different synonym fr it.
Rune Posted March 11, 2003 Report Posted March 11, 2003 Often poems written in the heat of the moment are most powerful. You do a great job of conveying the feeling of raw intense frustration. Great job.
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