Canid Posted February 16, 2003 Report Posted February 16, 2003 Welcome to the world of the living, Please grab a ticket and take a seat. If you were born in a hospital you'll need to wait in that line to be tagged. If you were born at home we have some questions for you before you can recieve your health card. Welcome to the world of the walking, The world of the waking. Mummy's too busy to feed you now, have a nanny. Nannys are too expensive, go play with the other children in daycare and preschool. Welcome to the world of the learning, You need a pencil and eraser to apply. Today we're going to learn about letters. If you don't understand, there's no doubt in our minds that you need some medicine for your psycological problem. Welcome to the world of the working, Wow, you know everyting there is to know. I'm sorry, but you don't have the right piece of paper. Goodbye. Welcome to the world of declining, If you don't listen to us, you aren't doing it right. Logic meant nothing in the beginning, why should it mean something now? You're outdated habbits are annoying, there are better ways to do this, get out of the way. Why was that excentric person happy? Oh, and by-the-by people, no need to worry, I'm that excentric person at the end. *points*
HopperWolf Posted February 16, 2003 Report Posted February 16, 2003 I like the first and last stanzas best... they have a more inhuman feel to them. And I think the flow a little better. I can see what you are trying to do throughout the poem (at least I think so) And you accomplish it well But I like those to stanzas best, they appeal to my more sci-fi inclined nature
Archaneus Posted February 16, 2003 Report Posted February 16, 2003 I like htis poem. I'm pretty sure you're trying to epress society's neglect of teh individual person. You acclomplished it well. Good job.
Canid Posted February 16, 2003 Author Report Posted February 16, 2003 Canid delays clarifying for a while, interested to hear people's un-influenced interpretations.
Rahsash Geldich Posted February 16, 2003 Report Posted February 16, 2003 I absolutely love this stanza: Welcome to the world of the learning, You need a pencil and eraser to apply. Today we're going to learn about letters. If you don't understand, there's no doubt in our minds that you need some medicine for your psycological problem. I was in traditional schooling, failing all of my classes and very miserable. When I moved, I suddenly aquired a 4.0 that none of my teachers would have thought of me. Who is right? The teachers who demand perfection, or the child who flourishes under a slight bending of the rules? Also, my brother gets in trouble all the time, but he gets the entire week's work done in one class. Who's right, the teacher that says he can't stay focused? Excellent poem.
Canid Posted February 19, 2003 Author Report Posted February 19, 2003 Well, since it looks like we're out of responders, it's author's commentary time. The idea was to point out how wrong the "way to do things" is. I'm a person who doesn't like to fit into the system. I was born at home and have a home-parent as my mother (and hope, later in life to go down the same path - parenting should be seen as a career of sorts). A lot of skilled people get dismissed from higher paying jobs, or any job at all, because they don't have the right certificate - and in some cases where it's easy to see they are better than anyone else for the position, they are turned down for that alone - it's insane. ...and new ideas take over too fast. A lot of public services seem to just love introducing new techniques - new gadgets. But so much of it is not as good as the old. Just because a thing is new doesn't make it better. Overall I suppose I just wanted to say society should be more open to the excentric - but the poem itself is a varied commentary. *bows*
HopperWolf Posted February 19, 2003 Report Posted February 19, 2003 The excentric is taken into society all the time, but society has a habit of MAKING it the normNever really understanding the significance of such excentricities. A Brave New World by Aldus Huxley illustrates this brilliantly, among other things. (A book you should all read!) Society is constantly looking to survive, and so when something out of the ordinary arrives, the society feels threatened and will either assimilate it or reject it. Still, look at the society around you and thing back 50 years, or even just 25 for dramatic changes. Things we see as perfectally normal now would be viewed as outragous in the past. Not that I have a point or anything... I was just pontificating.... what? stop staring. *runs away*
Canid Posted February 19, 2003 Author Report Posted February 19, 2003 But a lot of those changes are not good ones - which bothers me all by itself.
HopperWolf Posted February 20, 2003 Report Posted February 20, 2003 That's very true. I hate the way society leans a lot of the time. Makes me feel creepy sometimes! Always something is sacrificed to accomodate such changes. Tis sad to see it.
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