Killing

[Vlad]

I could kill us all right now,

Wouldn't be hard at all,

I could kill you right now,

Without so much-

As a second thought,

 

Just look me in the eye,

And tell me that-

You wanna end it all,

Turn into the curb,

Get smashed by a semi,

 

Small little thing won't save,

Your life is in my hands,

A twitch or slip,

Lapse of focus,

And we are gone,

 

[instrumental interlude; start lively, then mellow out]

 

gentle as the sea breeeze,

quiet as the wind,

slips by like sand

between your fingertips.

peaceful life for you and me.

 

it could go on for-ever,

but it will only last till dawn,

riding down the highway,

singing this melody,

i want to stay with you,

 

don't leave me here,

alone, oh so alone,

trapped by my own misery,

searching endlessly for love,

i don't know where to look,

 

[instrumental interlude; start slow, the get happy]

 

help...

[Blondemoon]

Nice Vlad...echoes my own sentiments pretty closely. Especially after a bad day.

[DoomGaze]

Vlad on a rampage... i like it, actually this is pretty good. I've been in your spot a couple of times, haha and boy, did i wanna kill someone, i got so mad haha, but then i realized that i could and i wanted to stay with them, but it was a lil too late..

 

Good Job nicely written poem

 

Thx for sharing

[Ozymandias]

Eloquent pathos in the car. I like it!!!!

You captured muderous/lonely/depressed feelings while driving beautifully.

[Rune]

Ack, Scary thoughts. Often we have to remind ourselves that we do put so much trust in those around us..especially while driving in a car.

 

As for the poem/song, it is very nicely written. Its also confusing, which I like. ^__^ It works well in this case. It helps to sort of guide the reader through the writers emotions and the flow is erratic, just as I imagine the driver's thoughts to be awhile driving.

[Archaneus]

I like this poem. Good job.